It is good you know how to draw, and your story is simple and nice.
However, in terms of graphic design and film, you might want to study the forms.
For instance, with graphic design. You could have used another line color than black. Though you will see crudely drawn animations at the top of the lists, they usually have refined color schemes or crafted line weights, and are not as random as they may seem.
In terms of film, you only use wide angles, and generally no motion, except lips, one head move, and one arm rotate. If you investigate the portal, you will see that comprehensive motion is at the center of good animation. That does not mean gratuitous motion, but motion, where even one line is moving, the entire piece seems to move against it.
You would greatly benefit from reading "The 12 Basic Principles Of Animation" on Wikipedia-which should start you with tons of good techniques to develop before again developing and submitting content here or elsewhere.
This was an excellent flash, but I don't know why the profanity couldn't be left out. It appeared strong enough without it by sheer humorous nature.
Great Humor, anyways. Thanks for uploading.
There are some real nice drawings and elements in this flash, artist or not.
Drama, which can simply be quicker transitions, or flashes at each entry,would entertain and provide an easier spirit to accept this work.
There is no reason why a nice sequential drawing can't be good flash. Add some esteem to this production and re-submit, by all means. And music is'nt a burden, it's just a established courtesy to accentuate absorption with viewing of such content, since the dawn of time.
Good drawings, promising flash.
Thanks for Posting this version
Thanks, I may look forward on re-submitting it some day, or make another contest, perhaps on NG this time. And also thanks for being constructive.
Good Storyline And Technique
This is a nice and recognized style with an interesting story. Something to catch the eye at the beginning might help your story jump out beyond the technique that you are learning. Maybe a prologue could help.
Are there any video game ideas in mind? It is rather suitable.
Singing Is Nice
I'd like to see the singing and storyline go a bit further. The end part seems like bitterness. The characters could definitely flourish, if you work on a full story, and maybe look at some other animations of that type to see how they related to Newgrounds audiences--which is quite large and diverse actually.
Nice lip-sync and character making.
I didn't really make this to appeal to Newgrounds xD If I did it would have been funnier. I made it to cheer up a friend who was depressed :]
I'm working on a pretty bit story game project right now anyway.
This is definitively of the adventure film genre, and superbly well done. Also, it is neither overly violent, but balanced in almost every way-- idea, technique, composition to name a few. This form is not common to Newgrounds, and is a pleasant more artistically minded animation.
Congratulations on a job well done.
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